Hey Gurka - I like it!

Just a few comments for your consideration...

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I simply don't see how it will be possible for you to get anything from my house until I get back to the states.


Consider changing to: "It will be very hard for you to get anything from OUR house until I return. We can work out the details later as my re-deployment date gets closer. For now, rest assured that all of your belongings are safe, and covered under our insurance policy."

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We both know that I have never threatened you with violence or laid a hand on you and I never would, so I urge you to be honest with yourself and with others in that regard.

Your personal safety has always been one of my biggest concerns while you were involved in the affair with LT-OM. I'm sorry to see that you are threatening me and I urge you to be honest with yourself and with others in that regard.

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I have made my Chain of Command aware that you may accuse me of threatening you. You can reach my BN commander @ XXXXXX. He has been privy to all of our written conversations since this all began (including this one, where you threaten to make accusations in order to get your things,) so I wouldn't expect a great deal of sympathy from him when you make outrageous claims without proof.


Consider deleting: "so I wouldn't expect a great deal of sympathy from him when you make outrageous claims without proof."

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The only thing I have done, is lived my life and my marriage in the light. It is what I require from my wife and a fellow officer. Nothing that has been reported or conveyed along the chain of command is done out of spite, but with a deep disappointment and sorrow. I initially tried to reconcile our relationship with love and understanding.


Consider changing: The only thing I have done, is lived my life and my marriage vows to you in the light. Nothing that I've reported or conveyed to the chain of command was done out of spite. My sole reason for exposing your affair to the chain of command was to gain their assistance in ending your affair with LT-OM and providing us with an opportunity to rebuild our M.

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But your failure to break off your affair with Frost left me no alternative but to act in any way possible that would end your affair and give our marriage a chance. I am sorry if the path that you left me creates a larger gulf between us. But I was left no choice.


Consider deleting this... it sounds "preachy" and like you're trying to educate her. ...and you shouldn't be appologizing to her for the large gulf between you... that's her's to own.

Last edited by RIF; 05/14/10 07:02 AM.