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Sounds good to me and incredibly well thought out and written.
If this doesn't work perhaps a face to face with the OM with your two children along side might make a difference and if all else fails one final warning before kicking the ****** out of him.
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Thanks H&P...what I wouldn't give to do just that! Unfortunately, I need to stay on the right side of the law, and the police might frown on that kind of justice... <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/rolleyes.gif" alt="" />
I'm particularly interested in any female feedback out there...I don't want to "put her off" by the tone, but I still want to overwhelm her with just how "wrong" this whole thing is...
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I think it is extremely well written. Long-winded but all encompassing.
I think if you were considering editing anything you'd de-emphasize or limit the language about the costs of such behavior to your wife and emphasize more the eventual cost to her son. OM's mother will be more inclined to act to protect her son from the eventual misery of an affair marriage than to protect you and your kids. There's no mention of "what she'll allow herself to do with him...she'll likely do to him". Appeal to her motherly instincts to protect her son.
That aside...I'm saving the letter in my personal MB archive.
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Thanks Mr W!
Any legal issues I might open myself up to? Could this be considered harassment or defamation? I'm thinking defamation requires any statements must be false, and I can prove it all to be true...
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3568 words slating her (probably) beloved son.
Would you read it all if roles were reversed ?
Needs to be snappier IMO. Get to why she should care a lot in the first paragraph or two.
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Hey L2F,
Great letter... my only comments would be:
* BLUF: Bottom Line Up Front
* Try to condense your thoughts down to no more than two pages... Any longer than that, and you'll lose the effect and most likely, her attention...
Semper Fi,
RIF
Me, BS
Her, Forgiven
Married Dec 86
Multiple A's that ended '90
Rebuilding In Faith since then...
Currently deployed to Iraq, but TEXAS is Home!
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BP, RIF, great input, thanks! 2 pages??!! I already shaved it down from 20! <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/wink.gif" alt="" /> As you can probably see, I was trying to get it ALL in there, and needed help identifying those essential thoughts/passages for maximum effect. Will work on BLUF and try to eliminate redundancy. Will bump up focus on negative effects to OM as well. I'm of a mind to take out a full page ad w/ the banner reading "Here's the REAL OM"... Any moms out there?? Would you make it to the end or would you toss it??
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"Slate"? What's that in Yank-speak?
Certainly you could also substitute Slay, Smear, Slap, Spit on, and the list goes on...
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I didn't make it to the end. And I was interested....:) I think you should leave out the parts about how morally bankrupt her son is...and a few other horrible things (true I'm sure!) you said about him. She will listen more if you say less ugly things about her child. Focus on how this A is damaging everyone including her son.
I would definitely send it...
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SW...thanks for trying, at any rate... <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/laugh.gif" alt="" />
Point taken, and while all the venting about his obvious demonic tendencies sure made ME feel better, you're right to think it would probably put her off.
I appreciate everyone's input...that's the beauty of these forums - the feedback everyone offers is as varied as it is valuable.
Thanks!
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I would suggest cutting it down to about 3 paragraphs and getting your point across clearly and concisely in the first paragraph and then backing it up in the next 2 paragraphs and closing with a powerful closing statement that summarizes your point. She doesn't need all this detail, she just needs the POINT. Most ppl don't have the patience to read long novels and the best ideas can be summarized in 3 paragraphs. More than that is often visual pollution that no one will read.
"It is not the critic who counts; not the man who points out how the strong man stumbles, or where the doer of deeds could have done them better. The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena.." Theodore Roosevelt Exposure 101
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