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I wrote this while thinking of a friend whose wife has been unfaithful.
Pain In My Heart ------------------------
Pain in my heart. I wear my heart on my sleeve With all of the lies, surely I should leave. But there's a part of her that I know is for real It keeps me from the door, it makes me heel.
Through pain I learn sorrow. Through pain I know sin. Through pain I learn happiness. Through pain I am made whole.
Pain is a crossroad. I wonder what path I should take Her presence frustrates me, her bite is like snakes. Yet there is something about her that keeps me around A depth to her soul that cries out in a lonely sound.
Through pain I learn sorrow. Through pain I know sin. Through pain I learn happiness. Through pain I am made whole.
Pain is a plea for help. She struggles from lies as her morality churns I can't rescue her now, to do so would only bridges burn. Alas, I can't stand idly by And watch as she struggles, with no ending in sight.
Through pain I learn sorrow. Through pain I know sin. Through pain I learn happiness. Through pain I am made whole.
Pain is what defines us. Through suffering we are made whole, That is what's told us, its truth does hold. So I will love her without giving in, The truth is what she must find, and find it from within.
Through pain I learn sorrow. Through pain I know sin. Through pain I learn happiness. Through pain I am made whole.
-An affair is the embodiment of entitlement, fueled by resentment and lack of respect. -An infidel will remain unreachable so long as their sense of entitlement exceeds their ability to reason.
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Gimble,
Very good.
God Bless,
JL
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***********EDIT*********** Wow gimmeabreak, I saw that before you edited it, that was really harsh...why would you be so mean? <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/eek.gif" alt="" /> Mrs. W
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Yes MrsW it was harsh and mean so I edited it. I'm new to these forums so I don't understand all that fancy etiqutte. Wow techie, I saw that before you edited it Is techie some kind of insult? <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/frown.gif" alt="" />
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Hmmm...gimmeabreak...I think it's just general life etiquette, not really exclusive to the forums here...but whatever...
Btw, lovely poem Gimble...<img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />
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Are you being Authentic MrsW??
Me: 56 (FBS) Wife: 55 (FWW) D-Day August 2005 Married 11/1982 3 Sons 27,25,23 Empty Nesters. Fully Recovered.
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real cute techie/gimmeabreak...changing names around here is no big mystery...happens all the time...sigh...<img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/rolleyes.gif" alt="" />
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Are you being Authentic MrsW?? Interesting that you should ask BK...hmmm... Mrs. W
FWW ~ 47 ~ MeFBH ~ 50 ~ MrWonderingDD ~ 17 Dday ~ 2005 ~ Recovered
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Nice, though a little on the long side <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />.
Perhaps it's time for a Marriage Builder's Poetry Corner?
Here's something I wrote just a few months ago - my first attempt at poetry in almost 20 years (interestingly enough, my previous attempt was also driven by experience with infidelity - nothing like a good old D-Day to get those creative juices going?...):
With healing heart, I trudge along This rocky path that lies before my eyes My armor’s damaged but my will is strong My mind is always on the prize
The glow ahead suggests the end is near The trials nearly over, the journey almost done We will soon be together, that much is clear Our love’s survived, we have won.
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Thanks, all.
ManInMotion, you are right, it is a little long, but my friend has a real fondness for music lyrics, so it seemed fitting to throw in a chorus :-)
I don't know what set the other guy off. I certainly wasn't supporting infidelity, just talking about the struggle.
If he was upset at my poor skills, well what can I say :-)
God bless all, Gimble
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MiM, I forgot to mention that i liked your poem as well.
If you folks could see me, you would never believe that poetry could ever come out of my mouth....
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Very nice both Gimble and MiM!
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Hi, MrsW
Would you mind telling me what the poster had issues with in my poem if you feel comfortable doing so? I would like to learn from this.
Thanks, Gimble
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Gimble,
I read what the poster said, and it was not an honest critique of your piece, it was a smart alecky response. Keep your day job, or something equally uninspired.
I love poetry, I read it all the time, since I was a child. I like your poem, although with the chorus lines it is more of song form.
And you know what? It doesn't even matter. You are being creative. And as someone once told me, spiritualty means being inspired. When I see someone tapping into their creativity, it speaks of happiness and inner peace. Wouldn't you agree?
Keep writing I say. Just let it flow. <img src="/ubbt/images/graemlins/smile.gif" alt="" />
Do you remember that thread WAT had with the lyrics contest? That was such a fun thread. Of course, he never would say who the winner was, so I of course just considered it was me. LOL
This place has a whole lot of nastiness going on lately, and for what reason, I don't know. It is so unnecessary.
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Hi, Weaver.
Well, the critique from the person unknown, may hold truth in that the poem is not my best work, which is much darker and inappropriate for this forum.
All I had hoped for was to possibly prop up a betrayed husband a bit during a tough time, otherwise, I would have kept it private.
To the poster, if you are still reading here. If you have something to say to make life just a bit better for someone in pain here, then by all means, speak up, if not, then please keep a sock in it.
Pain is a very real part of the process people go through here, it is the unavoidable fallout of an affair. The crap sandwich that the betrayed is forced to eat. Deal with it they must, and if they can approach the pain as an opportunity to grow, then all the better.
Gimble
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When writing prose, be sure it flows...
Don't just rhyme for rhyming sake, that makes us think you are a flake...
it sucked pretty bad made you sound like a hick, excuse me where do I go to be sick?
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yes I know mine sucks too.
I really like your signature Gimble and your posts.
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